Thursday, January 04, 2007

An Embarrassing Experience - Draft one

There were many embarrassing experiences which happened on me.And the most embarrassing situation let me lose my face.That day, I wanted to go to Taipei with my cousin.Before I took the train, I felt very nervous, because it was the first time for me to take a train.Then I went to the toilet to calm my feeling down.And, I found the door couldn’t be lock.I didn’t think that was a problem at that time.Then, a person opened my door.I shocked, and closed the door quickly.Suddenly, I felt very shy and wanted to run away from the place.Since then I have been very careful when I go to the rest room.

2 comments:

GIGI said...

Since then I have been very careful when I go to the rest room.

I will be very careful whenever I go to the rest room. 這樣子應該比較好
其他寫的都很OK~

飛奇 said...

"And, I found the door couldn’t be lock"

lock要加ed

我覺得文章可以不用分那麼多段,還有有些and或是其他有連接辭的句子,有些可以接在前一句後,不用自成一句,不然的話感覺像在列條例而不是文章
ex:【I have a book. And I also have a pen.】→→【I have a book, and I also have a pen.】