Sunday, March 11, 2007

A Nice Father - Draft one

Tom is an active student. He often gets good grades except Math. One day, he got poor grades in Math again. That night, Tom took the report card to his father. The man who looks rigid is Tom’s father. Tom was very nervous and afraid that he would get some punishments. On the contrary, the father just said that it was OK; he never chided him for the grade. He just wants Tom happy and health.

4 comments:

:V,瀞 ”婷* said...

→He just wants Tom to be happy and health.

其它ok

GIGI said...

except Math
→except後面加for

楊文琳 said...

he never chided him for the grade. →grades

結論劇要在加一句,感覺不夠有力

飛奇 said...

應該...都還ok吧