Saturday, February 24, 2007
Tips for Staying Healthy - Draft one
Health is the most precious thing we have in our lives. Now、I have three opinions for you. First of all、you need a regular sleep、go to bed and get up early. The next day、you will get more energy to work. In addition、do some exercise is also an important thing. You do not need heavy exercise、such as walking and jogging are OK. According to the news、laughing at least 30 minutes a day the body also will be better. Keep smile and bring the good mood to everyone. Try these tips、you’ll in good health.
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In addition,[do ] some exercise is also an important thing.
↑↑↑是不是要用動名詞當主詞doing
[Keep] [smile] and bring the good mood to everyone.
↑↑↑是不是也要用動名詞當主詞keeping
還有，keep後面要用動名詞ing
You do not need heavy exercise、such as walking and jogging are OK.
→such as 感覺是在講heavy exercise
According to the news、laughing at least 30 minutes a day the body also will be better.
→will also
所有的「、」應該要用逗號隔開!
...you’ll in good health....
will的後面是不是要加個verb啊??
you’ll in good health.→沒有動詞
其他都寫的很不錯~
Keep smile and bring →keep smiling and bring
First of all[、]←，ㄅ (有很多都降~)
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